Friday, April 18, 2008

party time poem# 4


I dressed and danced on the floor
I begged and begged and begged for more
the music stoped the music came
I played a song that feature my name.


kiss me tipsy very drunk
I drunk too much im drunk as a skunk
I need to go home to get some rest
cause the pian i have hurts my chest.

1 comment:

G. Latman said...

This rhyme scheme is supposed to be abcb, that is, the 2nd and 4th lines rhyme. You have rhyming couplets aabb ccdd.

You have used alliteration and figurative language, so all is not lost.